Common Weaknesses:
Weakness #2: Baker describes the escalators themselves that
rise to his office, “They were the free-standing kind: a pair of
integral sins swooping upward between the two floors they served without
struts or piers to bear any intermediate weight.” -The Lost Message of Words
Weakness #6: Comparing the black handrails, "like the radians of black luster," shows
the way he is able to control his writing. -Back of the Napkin Blog
Weakness #2: He uses figurative language to
describe a “steeper escalator of daylight, formed by the intersections
of the lobby’s towering volumes of marble and glass, met by the real
escalators just above the middle point.” -Contemplations
Bad Grammar: Salinger uses common words and even slang some slang like dough to try
and communicate his story. -Chillin In The Nyle
Best Overall Response:
The entire paragraph is good, but I was told to only pick a sentence... So this is it: "This unabashed overflow of foul language
seems to suggest that he is trying to make up for his young age with his
gratuitous choice of words in his attempt to be an adult." -The One Guy's Blog
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